Use... dramatic... ellipses...

(with thanks to... Carolyn)
With a screeching cacophony of mechanical discomfort, the plane dipped unevenly towards the runway and...
...made contact with the tarmac. The rubber on the tyres instantly shredded, the exposed metal sending a shower of sparks directly towards the stricken aircraft’s fuel tanks, which...
...were of course safely sealed. The plane skidded along the runway, hurtling ever closer to the airport’s observation tower...
...which luckily was still half a mile away, this being a sizeable airport. Wide-eyed and soaked in sweat, the pilot gripped the controls in front of him and silently cursed...
...his decision to wear thermal underwear and to reuse the same pair of disposable contact lenses he had worn yesterday. Then, with the inevitability of a volcanic eruption, the plane...
...came to a halt safely and every single one of its unfortunate passengers...
...disembarked.

15 comments:

  1. Rolling on the floor laughing here. Mostly because my dad's a Boeing engineer, and I'm thrilled to see someone get an emergency landing correct for a change.

    (I think all writers should be friends with an engineer, a cop, a computer tech, and a lab tech, so they can run their ideas past them. If they wince, scratch that idea.)

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  2. The Engineer, The Cop, The Computer Tech, And The Lab Tech — sounds like a movie.

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  3. Or else a bastardised Heinlein quote. “A writer should be able to run his novel past a mother, a general, a butcher, a con man, an architect, a composer, an accountant, a construction worker, a chiropractor, a priest, a lieutenant, a mathematician, an engineer, a farmer, a programmer, a cook, and a soldier. Specialization is for hacks.” (Forgive me, Robert.)

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  4. Thanks, Joel. Well done.

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  5. Ooh. I *hate* when people use ellipses to end sentences. What are they supposed to mean?

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  6. To be continued....

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  7. I laughed so hard, and meanwhile, I feel as though I was there in that plane......well done.

    Truely are an Author: capture the momemt, even if its made up

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  8. That's called the William Shatner effect.

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  9. YYYEEEEEEEEEEEEAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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  10. I'll be sending you the bills for this whiplash I've developed.

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  11. KAAAAAAAAAHHHHHNNNNN!!!!!

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  12. to the author of these, I love you. call me?

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  13. Because of this very post, I was inspired. Inspired to greatness, some would say.

    Check the link on my name to see what you're responsible for!

    And thanks for the killer blog. Though I don't write fiction for a living, I dabble in it on occasion, and I've fallen prey to many of your ways to write badly.

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