He opened the door and got into the car engine shuddered into life and the vehicle lurched down the driveway. He knew it was only a matter of time was against him and he had to do something had to be done. If there was one thing he knew for sure as he could be under the circumstances were against him, he thought with a grim smile formed on his face the facts.
Suddenly, the car jolted the car. He hadn’t been watching the road came to an abrupt stop in front of him was a barrier across the road came to an abrupt stop. It was too late to slow down into the ravine below the car was a deep ravine. He jammed his foot on the brakes weren’t working. With a screeching metal screech of metal screeched as he flew into the darkness opened and swallowed him.
He screamed, ‘Nooooo!’ he screamed. His life was flashing before he even had time to think about what he had done with his life was flashing before his eyes filled with tears of regretted so many things he regretted in his life was flashing before his eyes had time to close his eyes filled with tears in his eyes closed.
Beautiful. Absolute poetry absolutely.
ReplyDeleteBits of that worked quite well. "He jammed his foot on the brakes weren’t working" puts you in the moment in a neat way.
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ReplyDeletehttps://secure.wikimedia.org/wikipedia/en/wiki/Dissociated_press
These have been around for a while and are a lot of fun.
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I believe it's called anacoluthon is technical name.
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The last line is pretty poetic in my opinion is the last line sounds cool.
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