(With thanks to Andrew Trumper)
1. All of a sudden, there was
(a.) a resounding crash,
(b.) the sound of breaking glass
(c.) and then an eerie silence.
2. I glanced nervously at Mary.
3. ‘Did you hear that?’
(a.) I said.
4. Mary [hereafter referred to as “the love interest”]
(a.) nodded
(b.) and whispered
(i) ‘What was it?
(ii) It sounded like a window;
(iii) will you go and check?’
5. I listened to the silence [see 1.c, above] for a moment.
6. ‘I’ll be right back,’
(a.) I said.
And would I find the answers at the back?
ReplyDelete:-)
I was called to the incident when a neighbour of the victim alerted us via a 999 call regarding a resounding crash and the sound of breaking glass. On arriving at the scene I found an eerie silence, and made a check of the windows.
ReplyDeleteLol. I probably would like to hear a sort of speech/business meeting like that, but to read a book or short story in that format? No thank you.
ReplyDeleteI think this might be my favourite so far. Very good!
ReplyDeleteWearily, I answered the warbling phone, "Thank you for calling WBW tech support, how may I help you this evening?"
ReplyDelete"Yeah, this is Peter, I've got a crashed windows here. Looks like a 999 error."
I'll tell you what your error is, buddy, I thought, and answered pleasantly, "I'm sorry to hear that sir. Were you running the Aero Glass Interface at the time?"
Worryingly, as an architect, I tend to wander off into the exciting technicalities of building details and have my beta readers bring me down to earth with a giant THUNK when they enquire as to WHY the make-up of the wall is important. Bloody know it alls.
ReplyDeleteSuperb! I really like this one.
ReplyDeleteFrankly, that book would seem very well organised.
ReplyDelete>5. I listened to the silence [cf. 1.a, above] for a moment.<
ReplyDeleteThe silence was in 1.c.
And I don't think you want "cf" (meaning compare, see http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Cf.), you want "see" as I just used it.
Your blog is totally brilliant BTW; I'm just nit-picky.
"The silence was in 1.c.
ReplyDeleteAnd I don't think you want "cf" (meaning compare, see http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Cf.), you want "see" as I just used it."
And for all these years, I've thought that cf. was a neutral "see also." Thanks for the tip-off.
Hehehe.
ReplyDeleteSometimes I do write like that unfortunately. I studied for an MBA and then went into management. Bullet points come too easily...lol
Dave
Nit-picker here again. Hope you don't mind, but I re-wrote it (when I should be writing much more important things in this style). :-/
ReplyDelete1. The narrator (hereinafter "I") and the love interest (hereinafter "Mary") heard the following sounds:
a) a resounding crash, and
b) breaking glass.
Other than the dialog specified in the following paragraphs, no further sounds were heard (said lack of sound hereinafter referred to as "silence").
2. I
a) glanced nervously at Mary, and
b) said "Did you hear that?"
3. Mary
a) nodded,
b) whispered,
i) "What was it?"
ii) "It sounded like a window."
iii) "Will you go and check?"
4. I
a) listened to the silence (see paragraph 1) for a moment, and
b) said, "I'll be right back," said statement constituting a warranty and representation.
Ha! Wonderful. I love the last line. All fiction should include qualifiers of the legal status of dialogue.
ReplyDeleteI can do this.
ReplyDeleteThere is a room, R, containing two people; call these people P and D. Exactly one of the people in R needs money; without loss of generality, assume that P is this person, and D is the person who does not need money. Person D has money, and P knows that D has money, and P believes that if P asks D for money, D will give P money. Therefore, we can conclude that P asks D for money. We are not concerned about the exact amount of money that P asks D for, so let x refer to this amount. Person D is not willing to give x to P; therefore, D proposes that D give to P an amount of money in the interval [x/3, 2x/3]. We will now assume that P refuses this offer, and we will show that this leads to a contradiction. . . .
Fantastic! Is there an appropriate mathematical way of saying that P breaks D's legs?
ReplyDeleteFor each leg L of D, there exists a bone B within L such that P causes B to become a disconnected set.
ReplyDelete