I walked along an empty beach
just as the autumn sun was reach-
ing the height of its ascent
and that tableaux became cement-
ed in my mind and in my mem-
ory that day in late Septem-
ber. I stood and watched for min-
utes the pale and glimmerin-
g face of that great child of heav-
en glide across the sky so lev-
el.
My teeth are grind-
ReplyDeleteing...
Too silly even for Stickly
ReplyDeletecome dancing...
:-)
Ouch. My brain hurts now.
ReplyDeleteI love how you even break up syllables (glimmerin-g)
ReplyDeleteMore abusage of poetic techniques, please. I can't get enough of them
Fa
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actually if you string it all out into two sensible lines, the passage itself is quite nice! <3
ReplyDelete...and in the spirit of
ReplyDelete`i married an axe
murderer`...
I was lov
ed!
Painful.
ReplyDeleteExcept for the glimmerin/g line, because it abandons the iambic rhythm of every other line, I actually quite like it... I think it takes the overuse of enjambment far enough to come back around to be rather funny light verse.
ReplyDeleteWait, Joel - that's not enjambment. Well, it is, but so would
ReplyDeletethis be.
You don't have to
split the word, only
the clause.
He did that too, Jon.
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